The edgy part comes from the whole thing you just went on about "desire, hope, virtue, perfect world"-- it sounds like the kinda thing someone about to do a purge does.

And that's fine, it's fine to have boundaries on where to stop. I'm telling you though to use your magic a bit more so you can keep those boundaries. Sometimes you gotta do something different, cause now your "muscle" is used to what you usually do.